tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8990997961201803441.post3972323488525985042..comments2024-03-26T03:37:39.602-07:00Comments on Ranee` the wRiter: Three-Hundred Thursday #3Ranee`http://www.blogger.com/profile/08982272894927029549noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8990997961201803441.post-33667590613225133462012-09-21T11:36:14.061-07:002012-09-21T11:36:14.061-07:00Lines I love:Lying was also one of her job require...Lines I love:Lying was also one of her job requirements as a CIA coordinator.<br /><br />ghostly wake<br /><br />precurser to a phenomenom<br /><br />I already like the premise here and see where the story is going. CIA ingrigue, lies, romance, and it looks like some people are going to die.<br /><br />I wonder if you could jump straight into the story instead of explaining things to us in the beginning. Set us right in the scene and SHOW us how she's walking in the building, how she's feeling (is she nervous, excited, dreading it) and what she's doing to show this emotion. Then BAM she has a heart-skipping moment with the (I assume) future love interest that's ruined by thoughts of death.<br /><br />Premise is there. Writing is there. Just consider letting go of the first few paragraphs and getting right into the story.Kaylee Baldwinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12707226153627779741noreply@blogger.com